a poem to be checked

[IslamHayati]

Salam Alaikum

I wrote a poem in english, but since I'm not a native english speaker I need someone to chceck it for grammatical, spelling or other mistakes (for ex wrong usage of words).

and pls don't laugh )))))))) im a beginner

When is that storm going to subside?
Surely not before the khair will be applied.
We need a solution to the predicament we're facing
And we know it lies in the shariah's embracing.
Cause a thing you've gotta know
is that our iman plummets so low
when the rabid evil's billow
tries to rule the islamic world.

Let's not allow the situation to exacerbate
by making the flower of good forever gemmate.
That's the only way to make us bounce back
And return to God's merciful track.
God promised we would ace the evil out,
but behihd the prayer some action must be found,
so prepare to an intellectual debate
to stultify all ideas that are fake.

We ought to bring back the days islam was alive,
Not only in muslims' hearts but also in their everyday life.
When Allah Ar Raheem was the only valid authority,
And all people reckognized islam's flourishing beauty.
No 2K1s will happen again,
no callous crimes on the face of the earth,
if you simply realize
islam from dead needs to be rised.

[Islamic Revival]

Nice poem sis

[stranger]

Jazakallah khair for ur efforts sis...
there are few glitches which can be fine tuned for instance,
the first two lines have -ied sound while the next two makes -ing, sounds the last four are -ow..
The next paraphrase is not in symmetry with the rest...
The concepts are fine alhamdolillah, but they lack the soul... unfortunately...

[IslamHayati]

i knew sth was missin here, the soul or whatever u call it but since im a beginner i dont lose hope i will do better in future ) thanks for ur time:)